Okay so here goes....
Music, it only it had some music i would have doubled the score, poor animation can only get you so far. It had soma assemblance of a plot which is more then i can say for many submissions so it has that going for it at least. Don't explain the story, show it! Also the intro of your names was way to slow, if you are that egotistical at least make a logo with an interesting animation or pleasant font. It wasn't bad for a first go but it wasn't anything great either. Take your time on the animation, there's no rush to put something out there that isn't ready. As far as stick figures go, people draw them when they can't draw or the message of the story does not need detailed animation, the things i saw in this were just a mess...there is a lot of good stick work(insert joke here) out there and it is because of the ease of animation when using stick figures, when i see someone try to use them for animation it sucks when they are used so simply. If your character isn't going to be fully animated, develop the drawing more!
Better luck next time.